In the first blog post, I found that the comments mainly
show that I need more details about other topics within molecular gastronomy.
One of the comments mentioned that I need to include examples from sources as
well as using the general information from them. I probably will include
examples of molecular gastronomy in the world as it allows for people to better
relate to my topic. Another comment also specified that I need to review my
paper for typos, which I do need to try harder with. Also, I can also maybe
find more in depth sources as it may be of interest to certain people who want
to learn more about my topic. The rest of the comments from my editor follow
the same ideas as the previously mentioned comments.
In the second blog post, one of the main comments suggest
that I add an introduction to provide more information for people who never
read the first blog post. I would most likely add an abbreviated introduction
to the post before I reach the chefs and their biographies. This would better
lead to the topic of the post of the chefs. The second comment refers to the
pictures as I included them without any information on the dish and what’s in
it. Each biography will now include a description for the dish associated with
the dish and how it relates to the post.
Both blogs posts require more information and I may need to
include certain facts or ideas that attract more people to the blog as it helps
me find a voice that works better for the blog. Also, I need to watch for typos
and grammar as I have struggled through that many assignment with just that. My
grammar interferes with the meaning of my work, so any meaningful detail I have
is ruined by the wrong “their, there, they’re”. I hope this blog post doesn’t
have the same problem.
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